“There’s nothing cute about it,” he said. The register of his voice indicated decision more so than discussion.
She disagreed heartily and privately, staring past his head and out the window behind him.
It was mindless sweet-talk, she meant no harm.
The steering wheel suddenly felt uncomfortably hard in her back as she felt the passion leave him, shrinking away in the palm of her hand.
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This post was in response to Trifecta Trifextra Weekend Writing Prompt.
The prompt went like this:
For your prompt this week, we are giving you the first 33 words of a story. You need to complete it with 33 of your own words.
“There’s nothing cute about it,” he said. The register of his voice indicated decision more so than discussion.
She disagreed heartily and privately, staring past his head and out the window behind him.
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I can’t imagine I’m the only one who read this and didn’t immediately think “tiny penis”.
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Wow. I read it a couple of times. And, yes, I got the same image. Plus a few others involving performance shortcomings.
OldDogNewTits recently posted..A Collaborative Effort (For Trifextra)
I see her sitting on a guy’s lap, a little older than her, and having all their…um…progress come to a halt. Men can be sensitive, can’t they?
Oh. My.
Personally, at that point, she can start quoting the Farm Report and I wouldn’t care…
El Guapo recently posted..Trifextra – Finish The Story…
LMAO!
Heck, at least she had her mitts on the little guy, right?
OMG – would you believe I didn’t get this at first. I can be such a dunce (hi, dunce two). Now….hahaha…especially the last part. No, no, no, no….never, ever, “cute”. Hahaha-you’re crazy! (but in a good way)
The Mommy Patient recently posted..How to be Cool – The Brute Force Method
I take that as a compliment.
It’s gettin’ hot in here. . .
Excellent. I most liked the hard steering wheel in her back and the cute-but-not-so-hard manhood in her hand. Great image.
Ninja Mom recently posted..Look Kids, I Have to Go Do Something That is Not This.
Exactly, my dear! As something gets softer, something gets harder. Oh yeah.
Uh-oh. Car sex just turned into car-ex. Sigh.
Jessie Powell recently posted..Cool astronomy
lol!
That’s quite a vivid image and a ton of resentment packed in 33 words! =)
Sandra recently posted..Dear Trifecta Writing Challenge
Yep. He did NOT take that well…errr…obviously…
Thanks!
That’s funny! Unless you were one of the two people involved(!)
Libby recently posted..Writing Trifecta!!!
Good point, lol….Thanks!
I gotta admit, I was thinking “tiny penis,” too.
Love what you did with it! (That didn’t sound right, but you know what I mean.)
Hollow Tree Ventures recently posted..New Moon (alternate title: There’s a Bad Moon Rising)
Soooo…what you’re saying, is that you liked what i did with the tiny penis?
*snort*
been there, shrank like that
well written and extremely familiar.
Lance recently posted..Last Resort
OMG, that’s too much – and too funny.
Thanks! (I think)
Shrinkage!!
StoriesAndSweetPotatoes recently posted..Of Jeans And Gender
And it wasn’t even cold in the car. Oh boy.
I couldn’t help but laugh at the hard steering wheel and him being, well not-so-hard
JannaTWrites recently posted..I Have A Voice
Sometimes a girl doesn’t notice how uncomfortable she in while gettin’ it on in a car, until things get…um…awkward in the car. Oops.
Sexy and sharp. It took me a minute to figure out why the steering wheel was poking her in the back. Duh.
Christine recently posted..Crush
Thanks. Yeah, it’s been quite a while since I’ve had to make out in a car, but I think I remember that steering wheel in the spine feeling.
(Just don’t tell my mom I said that)
I hate it when the sweet talk turns sour. Sheesh. That man has no humour. I’m so thankful to have someone with an amazing sense of humour. Otherwise I’d likely be very divorced.
karen recently posted..Trifecta’s Trifextra: Weekend Eight
Yep, she sure hit a sore spot with that guy…
As a sharp-tongued gal myself, I have learned over the years that wit isn’t *always* appreciated. Funny slice of life and a great response to the prompt.
The Gal Herself recently posted..Sunday Stealing
Ha, I know this as well. Learned it the hard way. (No pun intended)
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He has no sense of humor does he? Loved the car sex….Too bad he didn’t. His loss and she should hit the road!
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Seriously. He should appreciate that she didn’t mind his offering!